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Thursday Tip: Fragments
Sentence fragments, shunned by rigid writers and grousing grammarians, often mimic speech and thus pick up the pace of your writing. Unexpected, they can command attention to strong points and comments. Here's an example from a recent New York Times article on revitalizing Starbucks:
But revitalizing the
Starbucks experience is not going to be enough. Not even close.
The full sentence would have been:
But revitalizing the
Starbucks experience is not going to be enough. It will not even be close.
Stripping the subject and verb from the front and leaving the fragment drives the reader straight to the point.
Here's another example from the ClearWriter archives:
The marriage of
The more conventional version might have been:
The marriage of
A small difference, but a
difference. Because the fragment is unconventional, it draws more attention to
the point than the conventional version does. Just be sure that the passage
merits the attention.
Thursday Tip: Using colons to link elaborations
Like the semicolon, the colon
joins in one sentence two ideas or elements that might be expressed in separate
sentences, strengthening the bond. The second elements are often definitions,
elaborations, or embellishments. Here's an example from The Economists 'The
day after Super Tuesday':
He [Barack Obama] also
snatched two prizes on the coast: tiny Delaware and, more symbolically,
Note that what follows the colon
neednât be a complete sentence. Consider another example from The Economist's 'Speaking
in tongues':
Indonesia's national
language'a version of Malay called Bahasa Indonesia or just Indonesian'is
unusual in that it is not the tongue of a dominant group: only about 3% of the
population are ethnic Malays.
This usage is dubious. Some
style guides (AP, for example) advise against using a dash and a colon in the
same sentence.
Another function of the colon is
to introduce a quotation (The minority leader delivered a harsh
rebuttal:) or a list, either in text (Three
areas for action:) or in bullets (see below).
But colons are often misused.
Here are three don'ts:
- Don't use a colon with for example (as in I've owned all types of pets, for example: cats, dogs, lizards, and
ferrets.). The colon implies for example,
which should be omitted.
- Don't separate a preposition
from its object (as in Over the last year
I've traveled to: Arizona, New York, and Cambodia) or a verb from its
objects (For dinner he ate: soup, salmon,
spinach, spaghetti, salad, and sherbet.).
- Don't use colons where you
should use semicolons,
or semicolons where you should use colons. Colons imply a direct connection
between two ideas--and what follows the colon is subordinate to what precedes it
(think of it as shorthand for that is).
And remember that semicolons should generally join two ideas only if both would
be complete sentences taken alone, sentences that should be parallel when
possible. (LeTourneau University has a quick primer
on the basic differences between colons and semicolons if you need a
refresher.)
